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SkyWalk Highway by ~ALostMind:iconALostMind:

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I had a dream, I was on a wicked road, It was empty, and cold, very very cold.
And in the dream I walked down the road, and called.I called for a name, many names, familiar names.But nobody answered. Nobody. Then there was a dark wind. A paper flew to me; It read,"Young man, you are gone, you are dead, walk endlessly, on the sky walk highway."

I finally noticed I was in the sky, but I still felt real.I felt as if I was in an abyss. A demon's abyss. Even though I was alone, I felt, felt death. I kept walking, but my feet soon hurt, they bled, but i kept walking, dying inside,but as I walked I saw a city, one so vast and majestic, as if Babylon was in front of me.

I tried to walk towards it, but it drew farther away,I yellled for help,
I yelled for God.

No reply. I only felt my heart.
My heart. It kept beating, but the beat grew slower.
I couldn't breath, I had acid in my lungs. I was dying.
I was burning,
I was crying,
I finished walking the highway,
I finally reached Hell.
©2009 ~ALostMind
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Finally, a good start.

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~phillGH Aug 5, 2009, 3:45:29 AM
here let me just edit all the typos for you,

I had a dream, I was on a wicked road, It was empty, and cold, very very cold.
And in the dream I walked down the road, and called.I called for a name, many names, familiar names.But nobody answered. Nobody. Then there was a dark wind. A paper flew to me; It read,"Young man, you are gone, you are dead, walk endlessly, on the sky walk highway."

I finally noticed I was in the sky, but I still felt real.I felt as if I was in an abyss. A demon's abyss. Even though I was alone, I felt, felt death. I kept walking, but my feet soon hurt, they bled, but i kept walking, dying inside,but as I walked I saw a city, one so vast and majestic, as if Babylon was in front of me.

I tried to walk towards it, but it drew farther away,I yellled for help,
I yelled for God.

No reply. I only felt my heart.
My heart. It kept beating, but the beat grew slower.
I couldn't breath, I had acid in my lungs. I was dying.
I was burning,
I was crying,
I finished walking the highway,
I finally reached Hell.

and you do know there really is one kind of abyss? or at least most abyss's (don't know the plural form) are at least similar as in total and utter darkness. although saying it's a demon's abyss I guess does make sense, i'm just wierd >.<.

Anyways, yeah, it was good.

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~ALostMind Aug 6, 2009, 8:37:07 AM
I must of made a hell load of mistakes. Thanks for editing it though :)

Ill make sure to fix it up now, thanks again :)
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~phillGH Aug 6, 2009, 1:05:55 PM
no worries

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~Harlequinbeautie Aug 31, 2009, 7:26:49 PM
wow!
That was really good!
I love how simple it was yet at the same time it was really deep.
Great job. :clap:

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~ALostMind Sep 2, 2009, 1:27:41 PM
aha :) thank you soo soo much :)
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~Harlequinbeautie Sep 2, 2009, 5:58:47 PM
^___^ your welcome

--
I Reject Your Reality and Subsitute My Own
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Save a trees dignity. Burn Twilight.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I'm going for world domination...
One twi-tard/tweeny booper at a time :evillaugh:
:heart:Tokio Hotel:heart:
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